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I was confused a little bit on the first read through because I assumed that the narrator was male. So, I gave it another few reads, switching from male to female and back again. Decided it is a woman speaking about her friend, Carol. And her cousin, Tommy. Either way, I enjoyed it. You might consider just adding some tiny aspects about a woman speaking to a woman if this is true for your scene. I loved the ending.
Fun flash! I’m surprised it’s not told in your inimitable dialogue — might be fun to give that at try…
Thanks for your comments, Shari and Kim. Great ideas to add dialogue, and Kim I appreciate your adjective. Wow, I’d never thought about my dialogue quite that way.
a NICO song
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